Narrative Assessment - Writing - 22 September 2016

Learner:  Lucy     Learning Coach: Megan Croll - LH2        Date: 22 September 2016

Learning Area: Writing

Learning Observed

Language features, e.g. similes, are used to give our writing impact.  A simile is when a person or object is compared with another object by using the word ‘as’ or ‘like’.  Lucy has been learning how to use a simile in her writing.  The Black Gibbons worked together to brainstorm some similes, then I invited them to use similes to describe the colours of the rainbow. Lucy participated in the group brainstorm and discussion, then used some of the ideas from our brainstorm to create her own poetic piece about rainbows.   After writing her draft, she then proceeded to publish her writing and illustrate it; using the correct colours and sequencing as in a rainbow.

Evidence of learning

Key Competencies/Vision Principles

Lucy is demonstrating that she is: Collaborative - sharing her ideas with her hapu group during a brainstorm session about rainbow colours. Capable - identifying the most suitable object to compare with each rainbow colour in her similes. Using Language, Symbols and Text - taking care to copy the information from her draft when publishing her work.  The size and shape of all letters are formed correctly.

Next Learning Steps

Look for similes in the books that she is reading Help another Learner to understand how to use similes in their writing Include a simile in future writing